ShopDreamUp AI ArtDreamUp
Deviation Actions
Literature Text
If anything I-
Some of my hair -
It's gone because - it just -
He would never-
Bruises on my - because
I fell down the-
I just -
He would -
It's not his -
Not his fault-
He will never-
He will never
make the same mistake again.
Some of my hair -
It's gone because - it just -
He would never-
Bruises on my - because
I fell down the-
I just -
He would -
It's not his -
Not his fault-
He will never-
He will never
make the same mistake again.
Literature
Does That Make Me Crazy?
She moves so elegantly and my
eyes can't help but wander.
Fuck, honey, you've got
legs to kill that make
models turn green, yet you're
holding back.
You extend them slowly
and only tease momentarily
before removing any
possibility of visibility,
and I am starting to think
you enjoy this game.
Three Olives and Alice White
start off our night, and I'm feeling
classy.
Slightly polished and
refined, I feel that I deserve
more than candle lit insecurities
and well woven lies,
this fabrication is a turn on
and I find myself aroused
in how terrible of a person you are.
Yet the pleasantries don't
stop there and we
sip togethe
Literature
Careful
God never gave with both hands.
I'm half the man that he is
and this is something I've
come to accept
though deep down inside
it's a reality that
I find hard to believe
but those pills are always
the hardest to swallow.
Deep in my soul I know that
I'm not the greatest guy
and that I often mess up
where most men excel.
I've never been great with
grand gestures of romance
or even simply letting someone know
how I feel
because my way with words is
lackluster,
and to me it's never worth the risk.
But darling you showed me
something new
and different
and now I find myself wondering
where did I go wrong,
but the truth is I
Literature
this.
you have shaded eyes quiet smile dark hair love ─
and I could do anything
if it wasn't for you.
collapse the borders on the edge of my vision;
everything's faded out to black shards.
It's cliché and stupid and it won't mean a thing to you, but I know
I won't be able to breathe when you leave tomorrow.
the shield whispering around my skin
was untouchable, I thought, perfect;
no one would be able to get in.
But you passed right through without even trying.
arou
Suggested Collections
Featured in Groups
Inspired by this piece. [link] by =DayinTynSane 
.
Half sentences. I thought that would be a cool thing to try in a poem. What are your interpretations?
It ended up feeling like... this girl trying to write out what happened but it's difficult... she can't. She ends up in the end only really writing out the justification. That he will never do it again. He will never hurt her again. Hope you like it.
. Half sentences. I thought that would be a cool thing to try in a poem. What are your interpretations?
It ended up feeling like... this girl trying to write out what happened but it's difficult... she can't. She ends up in the end only really writing out the justification. That he will never do it again. He will never hurt her again. Hope you like it.
Comments66
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactOh my, this is just gorgeous!
The cut-off sentences are something that could go wrong very easily, but you executed them very well (and I must say, they are a very original idea). They fit the context of the poem, of something that's very hard to speak about. On top of that, they get the point across, but still leave something to be interpreted.
The overall idea of the poem, abuse, has been seen in many forms. But, because of your execution of it, you get 5 stars for originality.
On top of that, your ending was marvelous. You summed up all of the little pieces into one whole that ties them all together, and leaves the reader with a dropped jaw and earns you five stars for impact. Applause for you! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/c/c…" width="20" height="20" alt="
" title="Clap" />